this is the fourth chapter of my teenage/young adult novel, "sorcery". i'd really appreciate feedback to help me grow as a writer. !TW - foul language!
You have improved your use of sentence length, paragraph length and punctuation for effect. The short and direct paragraphs and sentences really push the story along well. I also think it works how you are withholding information about Puppet and the protagonist's love interest.
Love the extra snippets of information on the characters. Vixen is awesome looking forward to seeing her future character development
You have improved your use of sentence length, paragraph length and punctuation for effect. The short and direct paragraphs and sentences really push the story along well. I also think it works how you are withholding information about Puppet and the protagonist's love interest.
I actually love Vixen as a character