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Kris Simpson's avatar

Love the extra snippets of information on the characters. Vixen is awesome looking forward to seeing her future character development

Lee Simpson's avatar

You have improved your use of sentence length, paragraph length and punctuation for effect. The short and direct paragraphs and sentences really push the story along well. I also think it works how you are withholding information about Puppet and the protagonist's love interest.

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